One of Mr. T’s favorite things to do is to tell me a story, and have me write it down. Actually, he’s been adding on to the same story for months now–Scritch and Scratch, about a boy and a girl turned into wolves who have many adventures in space.
Yesterday he was jumping out of his skin when he realized that he had a new story to begin, about a boy named Todding Toddington and his adventures in an alternate world, which other people can’t see. It’s part of what he’s calling The Series of Wonders. (And you know his Wonder Farm mama is lapping that up.)
Mr. T would be happy if I’d take his story dictation every day–even several times a day. But I don’t. It’s time-consuming. And it’s tedious. But I try to get to it a couple of times a week because it brings him such joy. And, I realize, he learns an awful lot about writing in the process.
As prone as I am to making teachable moments of every gosh-darned thing, I try not to lapse into teaching mode when I take down his stories. I don’t say in my Dana-Carvey-as-The-Church-Lady voice, See how I start each sentence with a capital? or Did you notice how I spelled this word? Nope, I just write down what he tells me, and ask for clarification when I’m honestly curious about something.
Still, he’s learning so very much every time we do this. Yesterday I tried to take note of what he was picking up:
- He knows that sentences end with punctuation, because whenever he continues a sentence that I thought he’d finished, he sees me erase the punctuation and add it later.
- He knows that exciting sentences end with exclamation marks.
- He knows how to use quotation marks because he sees me do this whenever one of his characters talks. He’s also learned how to add he said or she exclaimed in the most dramatic places in the dialogue. I assume he’s picked this up from being read to, and from listening to audio books.
- He knows that titles are centered on the page and capitalized. He’s even noticed that minor words like of and the don’t get capitalized.
- He knows about starting new paragraphs when the story shifts gears. Often he’ll tell me to “start down here now” when he’s ready to move on in the piece. Paragraphing is something that’s often hard for much older kids to grasp; Mr. T has intuited it by watching where I add paragraphs in his stories. Often I’ll simply ask him, “Do you think we should start a new paragraph now? Is the scene changing?”
- In his story yesterday, Todding Toddington found a piece of paper with a poem on it. As I wrote down his poem, Mr. T said, “Shouldn’t it be slantways ’cause it’s a poem?” I realized he meant that part should be written in italics; I’m not even sure where he picked that up. So I erased it and wrote it in cursive.
- In his story one character said to another, “Are you a windquist?” I asked Mr. T what a windquist was, and I pointed out that his reader might wonder. So he said, “This is the narrator talking now,” and he defined a windquist. I said, “I’ll make a new paragraph, since we’re switching to the narrator.”
- He narrated the sentence, “At that second a giant thing of wind blew into the room.” I’m all for writing down lines as he says them, but if he uses vague words like thing, I’ll often check to see if he can come up with a better one. He struggled with finding the right word, so I became his thesaurus and suggested a few: blast, gust. Yes! Gust was just what he wanted.
My hand and my attention usually peter out after two pages or so. It would be easier to type his dictation into the computer, but I don’t think it would allow him to notice what I’m writing quite as well. Watching me erase and rewrite as we go seems to be a tangible learning experience for him. And allowing him to watch me write seems like a natural bridge to his writing himself eventually.
I love the thought that my kids have never needed grammar instruction; they’ve picked up the tools of writing by loving to write. Even if it meant that, for a long time, I was the one doing the physical writing.
As I was writing this post early this morning, Mr. T woke up. His first words to me: “What are we doing today? Will you write my story?”
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I managed to have a serendipity storm when I read your blog plus the comments by the Brave Writer author about how boys’ imaginations are often shut down because the (mostly female) teachers around them don’t want to hear what interests those noisy, violent boys.
So I paid attention, and when I offered to write down what he was telling me about “The Robber Duck,” here’s what I got:
The Rubber Duck
He steals rubber. And he’s fat. He sneaks in like real robbers into costume shops. He steals the rubber costumes. He carries them in a sack. And he wears a mask.
“But he’s very scary!”
“He’s a duck! Ducks aren’t scary!”
“But he’s a ROBBER duck, and all robbers are scary.”
“Oh, forget about it.”He has a horn on his head, which he rams open doors with. He puts the rubber in a sack and at lunchtime he eats it and poops it into a pit.
The End
And then he was so excited about it that he copied it over in his writing into a little book he’s making. This from a child who has resisted all “let me write what you have to say, honey” blandishments from me.
Just the right action at the right time.
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Here’s Greta’s first story. I typed it, because I don’t do handwriting (carpal tunnel). She loved running to the printer to get it. ` We read it many times. She dictated two more stories and then painted pictures to go with them.
Bird on Hunt
The bird was looking for worms and she couldn’t find worms so she started flying to the tree where she wanted to make her home.
She tried and tried. But she couldn’t find the right branch. And that was the branch she landed on.
But then she saw another same bird and it was a boy. And she was like, “I’m going to mate with him!” And then he was like, “Look at that lady over there, she is so beautiful. I’m going to marry her! Well, it will be so fun to get babies.”
Then the mother was trying to get sticks. And she went far away and got sticks and sticks and sticks to make her nest.
And then he flew over to her and he said, “What are you making?”
“Our nest, of course! Our babies are going to be laid. We need to make a few more nests and a few more sticks.”
She was called a red winged purple bird and I bet when the babies are hatched we could see one.
The End
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My 9 year old loves to tell stories and always has, they are fascinating, but I’ve never written them down. Occasionally for a project I’ve written down his answers to questions for a father’s day gift or whatever but I can’t keep up with him. He gets so far ahead of me that I lose track of what he’s said and he can’t always remember what he’s said but I know how it is to “lose your train of thought” so I don’t want to interrupt him. Any suggestions on how to keep up? I have 5 small children, he’s the oldest so the one problem I could see with him dictating into a tape recorder is that I don’t know if I could ever keep up with him and I’m sure the others have stories to tell as well.



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